(c) Clockwork
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(c) Clockwork
by the way Fri 12 Dec 2008, 7:07 pm
Flashes of light and frequency on the news.
A man with his face torn off by a bear.
An aborted baby, run over at least twice on the road, discovered in a plastic bag only when it has erupted into a mesh of organs and gore.
A busload of people, blown up by some terrorist attack near the town central.
A sip of too-hot coffee, and his taste buds numbed.
He downs the rest of it in one gulp.
Dinner is takeout, a plate of dumplings and fried rice topped with teriyaki sauce, and orange juice in a cup, warmed to room temperature. Dinner is takeout, and untouched.
The phone rings.
He stands up.
He put the phone to his ear.
He listens.
He doesn't sigh, not anymore.
He speaks.
"I'll be there."
He pats his chest and waist, to make sure that his badge and holster were in place.
You can't be too careful, these days.
A man with his face torn off by a bear.
An aborted baby, run over at least twice on the road, discovered in a plastic bag only when it has erupted into a mesh of organs and gore.
A busload of people, blown up by some terrorist attack near the town central.
A sip of too-hot coffee, and his taste buds numbed.
He downs the rest of it in one gulp.
Dinner is takeout, a plate of dumplings and fried rice topped with teriyaki sauce, and orange juice in a cup, warmed to room temperature. Dinner is takeout, and untouched.
The phone rings.
He stands up.
He put the phone to his ear.
He listens.
He doesn't sigh, not anymore.
He speaks.
"I'll be there."
He pats his chest and waist, to make sure that his badge and holster were in place.
You can't be too careful, these days.
Last edited by the way. on Fri 12 Dec 2008, 10:26 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Re: (c) Clockwork
by LADIES AND GENTLEMEN Fri 12 Dec 2008, 8:33 pm
That... was really beautiful. I don't think I've been this moved in... god knows how long.
You amaze me, Isa. ;_;
You amaze me, Isa. ;_;
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Re: (c) Clockwork
by the way Fri 12 Dec 2008, 10:28 pm
Thank you Mikey
It was just for a challenge on the Word Prompt thread on Meebs, and it turned out... like that 0_0
You leave the shortest yet most impacting comments
It was just for a challenge on the Word Prompt thread on Meebs, and it turned out... like that 0_0
You leave the shortest yet most impacting comments
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Re: (c) Clockwork
by rock and/or roll Sat 13 Dec 2008, 9:01 pm
The short sentences were really effective. And there was a certain... bluntness to it. It worked well with the imagery; kind of showing how commonplace things like that were, yet no less terrible.
It had such an impact.
It had such an impact.
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